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Students, here's your big break.
Adorama Camera and SportsShooter.com present this rich learning environment, designed specifically for students. Start off by entring your best "One Week's Work", and you may end up having your portfolio reviewed by some of the most respected photographers in the business. As if that isn't enough, one dedicated and talented student is going to end up winning the title of SportsShooter.com Student Photographer of the Year, and take home the outrageously cool Grand Prize: "The Essentials", the tools to have when you're ready to start getting serious. |
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|| "Week's Work" Entry (April, 2009):
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Second Place: Matt McKnight
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Photo Story
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[ Click thumbnails to view all of the images in this picture story. ]
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Places:
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First: 1
Second: 3
Third: 0
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Reviewer Comments:
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Sean Burges
Photographer
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Ottawa | ON | Canada
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Comments | Apart from the photo of the police officer, I found the lack of clear focus plains disturbing. More pop in the contrast levels would be good, too.
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Talya Arbisser
Student/Intern
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New York | NY |
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Comments | Good situation and story to delve into... also I'm sure it wasn't super easy to gain access to this so kudos for that. Glad to know this is a week's sample of a larger story... as I definitely think you can go a lot farther with this. I like the choice of working in black and white as it gives it a kind of bleakness that I think works well with the subject... I think overall you are too wide in your images... specifically with images 1 and 2 I think I would have liked to have seen people's faces more closely... especially with image 2... I think there might have been able to capture a different moment with more emotion. The fact that it almost looks like Officer Cooper is smiling while handing the eviction over is something I really question... I'm also not sure this is the best perspective... as it is pretty much a straight on shot... the high depth of field in this image and most of your others doesn't allow me to focus anywhere specifically and get maximum impact.
In photo 3 I'm having difficulties seeing that this specific tent is part of a tent city... This might have been a camp out nearly anywhere... Framing the photo so that there were other tents in the background might have been beneficial to the image.
Photo 4 I again have an issue with the fact that one of the officers is smiling. It can't be an easy situation to have to kick people out of their tents and off of this land. Rather than focusing on the police, I think it would have made more of an impact to focus on residents who were forcefully being removed.
I think photo 5 is one of the better images... but again I'm having problems with the lack of emotions I am seeing here. Without your captions I would have difficulties really understanding what was happening in the majority of your images. I do like the perspective you have taken here... but would like more info... such as tents etc. in the image.
Photo 6 - the circle of people again might have benefited from a different perspective. I find my eyes are drawn towards the empty extraneous sky at the top of the image. I wish that I could see the emotion on some of these people's faces. Also watch your captions... check on capitalization and apostrophes for the Lord's Prayer.
Photo 7, I am again having difficulties getting a focus on what this image is really about. I like the fact that you captured this image after the residents had been kicked out... but I'm just not sure it really tells the whole story. Use of a more shallow depth of focus and really looking at something specific might have helped this image out.
Again... i think this is a great subject and an interesting story... I'm not sure whether this is something you can keep shooting, since the residents have left... but hopefully some of my ideas or suggestions might help you with your next story. Good luck!
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Lourie Zipf
Photographer
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Livermore | CO | USA
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Comments | Nice lighting, but the photographer, I feel, is removed from the story. I really like the image with the silhouetted person. I feel that the photographer didn't get close enough and really get into the lives of these people. I like the fact that they shot it in black & white. It gives a stark feel to the picture story.
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Les Stukenberg
Photographer
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Prescott Valley | AZ | USA
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Comments | Good story, nice selection of photos, great captions! I liked all the angles you used my only comment would be give me a vertical!
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Jonathan Moore
Photographer
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Los Angeles | CA | USA
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Comments | I thought I saw this story a couple weeks ago...
First image is good, though I would have zoomed in a bit more on the guy and perhaps shot at a higher angle. The biker in the white is framed nicely...
The second image is a bit busy for me. Try avoiding power lines and other structures that have little or nothing to do with the story. Also the black and white doesn't work so much for me here (generally green grass turns out really muddy, and here it seems to blend too much with everything else).
I like this image because it's a more unique angle. You shot from below to include another element to the story, the guy's dog. Good job.
Nice framing on the cop, though it's a it hard to tell what he's doing or who he's talking to...
This photo needs to be in color. The flame blends in too much otherwise.... Nice silhouette on the guy lighting up though
Not much happening here, A close up of two or three of these guys shot from a lower angle with the some sky would have been better. Also the video guy is distracting (I know there was nothing you could do about that though...)
Nice ending, but again this doesn't need to be in black and white...
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David Manning
Photographer
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Athens | GA |
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Comments | I think its interesting that in one month, the student entries in the contest have produced 3 stories about the homeless and tent cities.
Of course all three are very nice and well done. I like it but i would prefer you to focus in on a few people there and tell me their stories. (ala entry 2)
Good selection of photos, nice composition. Excellent work overall.
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