Andrew Ong, Student/Intern, Photographer
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West Henrietta | NY | USA | Posted: 4:33 AM on 01.04.08 |
->> Hey there steve ...
your show doesn't look too bad for the first try, but these are a few things that i'd tighten up to make it better...
There are a lot of repetitive images in the show, meaning, you were working with these two guys that were painting in one area, and most of your shots come from that area. they have the same background and same concept as other shots, so edit tighter.
when you edit tighter, you're not going to have to shorten the show, and i think there were some repetitive comments and a little too much music going on. just like the images, cut it down.
many of the things that i heard the two guys talking about had no connection to something else they would say. if you show the image of the sign saying "must have permit to paint" then the guy repeating that doesn't contribute to the story.
because of some of the comments i heard from the artists, i found that there wasn't really a story to the show, it was a location, and you found a couple guys. ok, great. what makes them different from any other guys that go there. are they any good? it didn't seem like they had a "good spot" to work on, why? as my multimedia professor, and one of the leaders in the industry, Will Yurman tells us all the time, finding the place is not a story, you must find the place, then find the story. i think you need to refine your search within the site and find someone that stands out, who does it for a reason other than "it's fun"
other than that, i think the sound quality wasn't bad, you had some really nice frames and you worked well with what seemed to be a dark, one doorway lit and limited space.
good work steve. keep going with it! |
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